Iguana vs snakes
Iguana vs Snakes
Iguana vs Snakes
It
was a lovely day until “snap!”
I
ran as fast as I could on the sharp shells. Through the slippery rocks.
“ Oh
no!” The slimy snakes tangled around me.
Finally
I escaped back up the rocks.
I
tried and tried to get up on the cliff but my claws were slipping.
Fortunately
I made it safe and sound.
By
Gemma
IGUANA VS SNAKES
Noticing a snake slithering around me, I was nervous.
The second snake went for the attack. I ran for my life. It was
depending on me. I zapped desperately through the
sand. I crashed into snakes constricting me. I escaped
by leaping over a little ravine. Sprinting up a hill, I was safe
home.
by Kadin
Iguana vs
snakes
A snake quivers then slowly slithers
after the iguana.
The snake jumped onto the iguana.The iguana sped off.
Some more snakes approached. One snake bounded over another snake. The iguana
got trapped by a ball of twisting snakes.The iguana used his legs to run fast.
A snake used its power to try and kill the iguana.The snake climbed some rocks,
using the powerful muscles in its body.
Finally the iguana reached the top. It grabbed onto a
strong rock and pulled its legs up. It was safe. The snake stopped. It
was not able to touch the high rock so it slowly slid back down and hid under
the rocks, waiting silently for its next feast.
By Kaea
Iguana vs Snakes
Snake circles the lguana as he goes deeper. The lguana does not see the
snake as it camouflages in the rocks.
TAP! TAP! The lguana sprints to safety.
Snake’s friends sprint out of the rocks and try to catch him. He sneaks
out and bounces up the rock. Snake grabs for his tail, but lguana’s tail slides
out like a pro. He sprints to a deep hole, almost falling into it, but his
skills lift him out.
He sprints as fast as any lguana could. He bounces up as the snakes try
to climb up after him.
The lguana is safely home with his mother and rest of his family.
By Dallas
Iguana vs Snakes
CHOMP!!! The gigantic snake
bit me.
“Ouch.”
There were nearly 300 deadly snakes
chasing after me.
I was running for my life. I ran
furiously along
the beach.
“Oh no.” I thought. “They’re catching up!”
About twenty vicious snakes
surrounded me, hoping that I wouldn’t be able to get out.
Sliding and struggling, I finally pushed
my way out of their deadly grip.
I leaped onto the rocks and jumped over a
deep crack.
Finally I found safety and I was so glad I
never saw the snakes again.
By Dillan
Iguana vs snakes
I`m standing as still as the stones
beneath me.
Ok, the snakes are gone.
“Ow! Now I’m sprinting with snakes
attacking me.
I am caught!
Struggling with all my might I
escape from the
constricting slithering ball of snakes.
Climbing with all my strength, I jump with my legs reaching out like a
grappling hook.
I have made it home.
by Ethan
Wow - what amazing writing. I just love the exciting action verbs you have all used to build up lots of suspense and imagery. I could imagine that I was there with the snakes and iguana. Keep up the amazing work.
ReplyDeleteMrs E
Pod 7, I loved reading your exciting writing about the iguana that is being chased by the snakes. I think you have used some powerful verbs. I really liked "sliding and struggling". Using the adjectives "deadly" and "constricting"is very effective. I think you have used adverbs such as "desperately", "furiously" and "silently" very well to give your writing a sense of urgency. I could clearly picture the iguana, running for its life, when I read it. The simile about "legs reaching out like a grappling hook" is excellent. Keep up the great writing, everyone.
ReplyDeleteWowwee! Gemma,
ReplyDeleteI loved the words Sharp, snap, slippery, slimy, tangled, slipping and fortunately.
I loved how you did NOT use "escaped" twice because the Iguana first escaped the snake that tangled him up in a big cuddle (cuddle is from Peyton's writing that I suggest.) and then the whole den of snakes!
Yours sincerely,
Aston.
Wowwee! Kadin,
ReplyDeleteI loved the words noticing, slithering, noticing, nervous, depending, zapped, ravine, sprinting. And the phrases "went for the attack," "jumped over a little ravine" and "ran for my life."
Did you actually know what constricting meant, because I saw it in the thesaurus!!? Busted!! You should know that you need to know and advanced sentence of what the word means before you can write it in your writing!
yours sincerely,
Aston
Hiya Kaea, (does that rhyme?)
ReplyDeleteI love the words quivered, slithered, approached, sped, bounded, trapped and twisting!
Yours sincerely,
Aston
Hi Dallas,
ReplyDeleteI just loved the thrill of reading your story. There is to much to write and to little space to write it in..... so can I tell it to you in these words?
AWESOME WRITING!! It is good that you did not add a painted picture... you did it in your own words!
Yours sincerely,
Aston
Hi Dillan,
ReplyDeleteI love love love your writing!!
Did you really do all this?.... it is so hard to know or not because it is so good!
Yours sincerely,
Aston
thank you so much Aston, actually Mrs Leydon helped me with, pushed my way out of their Deadly grip
DeleteHi Ethan,
ReplyDeleteYou really re a great hook writer!! You will definitely be better than Roald Dahl if you keep it up! The verbs, sentence starters, wow words, even use of punctuation is always at top mark in your stories.
How did you get to be so good?
Yours sincerely,
Aston
Hi Pod 7. I have thoroughly enjoyed your writing about the brave iguana. What a lucky guy he is to escape the snakes. Without having watched the clip, you have really brought the action to life with your descriptions. I am inspired now to share the movie clip and your writing with my literacy group. We would love to share our responses with you if you are keen. Thank you for making my day! Karen Scott
ReplyDeleteHello Te Puke Primary School, and Ms Scott. We would love to be able to share your responses to the Iguana vs Snakes video clip. We are learning how to give feedback to others about their writing, so it would be very good practice for us. Regards from Mrs Leydon and Pod 7
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